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Nell and The Afterdark
Nell decided then that electrical shocks were nothing compared to bullets. She made no noise; she couldn't.

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Derek had taken a gun from someone and had used it to shoot through the visors of at least four men, who lay limply on the ground. He shot the rest of them with some difficulty, as they had found cars to hide behind. The Afterdark used up all the bullets soon (he was not a very good shot), and sought the men one after the other, caving in chests with ferocious punches and kicks. He even succeeded in tearing the arms off of a man. It made a popping sound when the humerus was removed from its shoulder socket. Derek found the sound rewarding.
He heard Nell scream, a piercing shriek that grabbed his attention.
"Ah, Hell," he snarled, and ran toward the sound.
Sure enough, there was his mechanic. A man had her pinned to a large oak, and his visor was up. That meant to Derek that he could be manipulated, but the moment that he tried to control the man with his telepathy, he realized he couldn't.
Whoever that man was, he had powers. The Afterdark charged him and literally tore him away from Nell and hurled him to the leaf-strewn earth. When he saw the man's face up close, saw that it was a copy of one of the men he had just killed, Derek recognized what he was.
"Seer," greeted the outraged Afterdark. He put his foot on the rival villains chest to keep him from getting up and to constrict his ability to breathe.
"The Afterdark! I was surprised to see you here. I was just asking The Fixer about why you followed us!"
Derek stomped on the man's ribs and broke them. When he blinked, he was standing on nothing but crackly leaves and his enemy was nowhere to be seen. "Fuck."
Meanwhile, off to his left, Nell had her hands wrapped around her gut. She was moaning.

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