snippet from Olivia's Fairytale
Olivia's Fairytale
-I am angry because Micha is a fat creeper who won't leave me and my friends alone and I hate him.

Not exactly Steinbeck...

Symbolism?

I am angry because the flabby walrus* is a fat creeper who won't leave me and my friends alone and I hate him
* The flabby walrus is symbolic of Micah. They are both fat.

Simile?

I am angry, like a redneck when the fridge is out of beer, because Micah, who is fat like a walrus on a Big Mac diet and creepy like Jack the Ripper on steroids, won't leave me and my friends alone and I hate him like Lindsay Lohan hates sobriety.

Alliteration?

Maddie's mad at morbidly meaty Micha mainly because Micah molests mes amis et moi, making me move toward murdering Micha.

I give up. There's so many other things I could be writing about right now! I focus so much on one terrible idea, I wish I could just throw them all in a blender and have it churn out an awesome story! Well, I can only hope the stories get better from here. Trust me, there is more to come, and it doesn't involve the fatty walrus.




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